After reading the script for Choices, written by Abigail Green, I must say I wasn't too impressed. As the title suggests, the short film is all about choices, and how Dan seems to always make the wrong choice. The script started off promising, the characters were well descripted, the scene was clearly depicted. Abi made it clear that the central character, Dan, is weak and seen as a 'loser'.
The start of second scene shows that Dan can teleport through doors to a different location. There is no indication on how he has obtained this power or why he has it. As it is only a short film, it is not a necessity. The story develops with Dan often being peer pressured by his friend Greg. We don't have much idea to the importance of Greg to him, so I thought a good idea to make the script more interesting if we had Greg as Dan's figment of imagination. This effect is used in many films, and it adds a twist to the story which makes the film much more engaging. An example of this was used in Shane Meadows' feature length film Dead Man's Shoes, where the the character, Anthony, was later to be found out that he had parished years before the story was set and that he was his brother's imagination.
Personally I think this would make the story much more interesting, and would add a twist to the script. The script now to me seems like a moral documentary that you would show to teenagers. Hopefully after re-editing the script, it would look more visually aesthetic and engaging for the audience to make it seem more like a short film.
